Nothing gets a rejection faster than
unrealistic characters. From the opening page, everything revealed about them
builds expectations. And a story falls flat when the characters fail to uphold
those expectations. The result is a contrived story that will make readers put
your book down…and that’s the last
thing we want!
Behold, 3 Valuable Tips for Creating Realistic Characters
Tip #1—Give Your Character Personal Motivation
Only one thing drives a story
forward: Character motivation. A
plethora of authors make the mistake of drafting detailed storylines and
plugging their characters into place. Though a storyline may give direction, Alan
Watt advises we should hold our stories loosely in his book The 90-Day Novel: Unlocking the Story Within.
If the character isn’t
motivated to achieve something personal, the story drags. In other words, if
your characters don’t care, neither will your readers.
Storyline with No Character Motivation: Tad Smith is determined to follow family tradition and climb Mount
Everest—both his father and grandfather tried and succeeded. Tad and his crew
encounter trials and tribulations on the treacherous journey and Tad even loses
his best friend George along the way. In the end, he reaches the top…but at
what price? Tad learns a hard-knock lesson in priorities that forever changes
his life.
While this is nice, there’s not really
anything driving us to read this story. A bunch of guys climb a mountain, stuff
happens to them along the way and in the end they learn a lesson. But there’s
nothing to care about. Let’s revise a little, shall we?
Storyline with
Character Motivation: Tad Smith’s father believes he
isn’t strong enough to carry on the family tradition of climbing Mount Everest…but
Tad is determined to prove his father wrong and gathers a crew who are just as resolute.
With his best friend George at his side, Tad and his crew encounter trials and
tribulations on the treacherous journey, but giving up is not an option. If Tad
accepts defeat, his father will be right, and the crew is determined to conquer
the mountain for fortune and glory. George is fatally injured and, with his
dying breath, tells Tad he can do anything…he just needs to believe in himself.
Tad demands his crew turn back. He won’t lose anyone else to his personal
ambitions and vows to continue alone. George’s sacrifice will not be in vain. The
crew refuses to abandon Tad and they all agree to continue. In the end, they
reach the top and Tad can finally gain the respect of his father...but his
father doesn’t care and refuses to acknowledge Tad’s achievement. Only then
does Tad realize the truth—he didn’t need his father to believe in him; he
needed to believe in himself. The crew receives honor, glory and riches for their
efforts, but their victory is bittersweet as they toast to George’s empty
chair.
This revised storyline is more about the
characters’ relationships versus a bunch of guys climbing a mountain. It’s
about brotherhood and learning how to believe in yourself. The story has
potential because the character motivation is linked to personal goals.
Tip #2—KNOW Your Characters
Many authors make their characters do
things with the sole purpose of driving the storyline in a certain direction. All
authors should ask themselves one question as they write: “How would my character
respond in this situation?” Let’s say you’re writing a sci-fi story and a
vicious, drooling alien is about to attack a defenseless child. Your shy,
bookworm heroine suddenly finds hidden courage, draws the nearby Samurai swords
on display and hacks the alien into sushi. You may need your character to do this, but unless you establish a hidden
strength in your shy character early in the story, the actions come off as
phony.
Here’s another way of
putting it. Imagine someone you’ve known most of your life (e.g., your overprotective,
neat-freak grandmother) and plug them into your latest story. Now rephrase the
question, “How would Grandma respond
in this situation?” Grandma might glance at the swords, but in reality she
would pick up her trusty broom, stand like a lioness in front of the child and
scold the alien for the slimy mess it’s making before whacking it into
submission. The point is you wouldn’t have Grandma wielding Samurai swords and
hacking the alien into sushi because you know Grandma hates sushi. All joking aside, you get the point?
This is the level of depth you must
establish when creating your characters. You must know them—inside and out.
Tip #3—Listen to Real Dialogue between Real People
Dialogue is a great way to reveal
information in a story. However, a lot of authors take this tip to an
unrealistic level. Let’s use Tad for our example and engage him in some
dialogue with his father.
“I’ve told you a
hundred times, Tad, you’re not strong enough to climb Mount Everest. You’ll
never have the honor of achieving the family tradition your grandfather and I
obtained.”
Tad clenched his
fists at his side. “You’re wrong, Dad! I’ve been training for years, just like
you and Grandpa did. I’m going to make you proud. You’ll see!”
“It has less to do
with physical strength, son.” Jeremy poked his finger into Tad’s chest. “Have
you forgotten you were in therapy for three years trying to recover from your
mother’s death? Don’t you remember how your grandfather almost died climbing
that mountain? He trained for ten years and had two failed attempts before he
succeeded. Everest changed him. He experienced hallucinations, lost friends!”
Question: if Tad’s whole purpose is to follow in his
father’s and grandfather’s footsteps, doesn’t he know all this already? Two
people don’t rehash information they both already know. The only purpose of
this dialogue is to inform the reader
about their history. It sounds stilted, forced and contrived. Also, there’s no
mystery to make the readers want to keep flipping pages. Let’s try again:
Jeremy crossed his
arms and narrowed his eyes. “I talked Bradley out of sponsoring you.”
“You did what?” Tad clenched his jaw, waiting
for an explanation, but his father offered none. He steadied his breath. “I have plenty of other sponsors I can—”
“And I’ll talk
them out of it, too.” Jeremy stalked forward until he was nose-to-nose with
Tad. “You know how I feel about this.”
“What more can I
do prove I’m ready for this? Don’t you think I’ve trained hard enough over the last ten years?” Tad crossed his own arms in
defiance. “I’ve endured—”
“You don’t get
it!” Jeremy threw his hands in the air. “Conquering Everest isn’t about
physical strength, son!” He stabbed his index finger into Tad’s chest. “You’re
not strong here! You’re not like me,
and that mountain will kill you like it almost killed your grandfather. That’s why he was never the same after
he came home.”
Tad fought the
stinging in his eyes and inwardly cursed when tears slipped down his cheek.
“See what I mean?
You can’t even handle a simple truth about yourself. You couldn’t even deal
with your mother’s death.” Jeremy stomped to the door. “You’re not going,” he
said over his shoulder. “That’s final.”
This dialogue reveals their feelings for
each other while leaving many things unsaid that scream through the undertones
of their behavior. Also, keep in mind the information left out can be woven
into the story later where it’s more appropriate. The most important thing is
to let the dialogue unfold naturally.
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There is so
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